Nutrition Poem Foods
Posted in Health and Nutrition on 06/25/2009 07:49 am by Steven Nerenberg
please help making this poem better!?
my friend wrote this poem at her english class and she wants me to make it better. but idk how i could make it better because im bad at writing poems so please help me make this poem better…
Life is a truly amazing thing
Every organisms live and die
by a sparkle of water and sunlight a buried seed grows
by food and nutrition we grow
a seed grows roots to stable itself from the underground
we crawl and walk to stable ourselves from falling down
then the plant is ready to come out to grow outside
and we come to an age to face the real world.
then comes a new level of obstacles we must confront
and step by step into pleasant dreams.
That poem is honestly horrible.
“Every organisms live and die” —-> obvious? bad grammar.
“By food and nutrition we grow” —-> obvious again
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